Lost Story

                   When I was lost

When I was with my dad at the warehouse we were buying some cool toys for my little brother and some PRETTY PRETTY PRETTY clothes  for my mum because it was nearly my mum’s birthday and it was my brother’s celebration. We were going to the book aisle but he turned around. I was lost and I tried to think of something. Then I thought to myself ‘Hmmm should I look for my dad”. So I looked for my dad and then I saw other kids with their parents. My eyes turned red and I cried. Finally I thought to myself “hmmm I heard that some kids were lost and they went to the counter and said to the manager that they were lost so if I’m lost I should do that too. So I did. I told the manager that I’m lost and I’m trying to look for my dad.

(dad)”Hmm I hear  that my child is lost. What! I hear my child's name. I better go quickly to the counter and should tell her that she  has to hold the trolley.

(Lorena)”Finally my dad is coming. I see him. I looked at his face and he was happy but then he said come on we are going home. But he didn't tell me that he was going to tell me. At night time he forgot to tell my brother. It was bedtime for me. My parents told me to go to bed early because I was a little bit naughty. So I went to bed early.            

My goal is to make sure I put my full stops in the right place.